The sparse language is great without being overwhelming, or without color at all--it has a good balance. I liked the opening and ending lines:
3.
in a blind dress
on an August
a peach [...]
too much brightness
I also like Smallfield's poem "after Niedecker 4" in Omniverse here. It's a great look at a poem that can encapsulate something--in this case, you can look at it as a summer night. Many people have lilac trees, and you can smell them in the air, barefoot, while appreciating your cool white pillow. I love his ending:
water , summer
(the hot) shore
Good-bye to lilacs by the door
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